May 4, 1945
Your letter and enclosure caught me in the midst of Examinations and preparation to go East for two months. Hence this sketchy reply:
The poem is interesting and I think you have brought out the pathos of the situation. Taking your points in order:
(1) Yes Jarrod's deafness is clear: 'The sound his ears would never hear' is a good line and unambiguous.
(2) The italicized lines on page 6 are not so clear. They might be amplified.
(3) lark (page 2) is all right. So is 'halyson' though I do not like 'magicking.'
I am sorry I cannot go any further into the implications. I am rushed off my feet.